Thursday, 4 April 2013

#4 - Lightly Seared On The Reality Grill


From NaPoWriMo's prompt four. From an Iain M. Banks spaceship name..
Lightly Seared on the Reality Grill
I've been lightly seared
On the reality grill again.
Last night that was but
Still I feel the pain and heat.
Oh, the reality grill
Leaves angry tiger stripes
On what was once unperturbed skin.
Lightly seared, I was -lightly, yes - but oh! 
So many times seared
On the reality grill.
How stupid of me - I never learn -
End up again on that grill
Ended up on that reality grill again
When, again, last night I spoke and
Then, again - hope died..
Without hope I was left
On the reality grill again.
Lightly seared.
Heavily scarred.

4 comments:

  1. Ouch! Loved what you did here.

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    1. Thanks! It was a very inspiring title to work with!

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  2. Yes, very different from mine! I really like how you repeated parts of the title in different ways throughout. Your last two lines are a nice way to close.

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  3. Thanks, I love using repetition in poems, and reading poems with repetition.. Hope NaPo is going well for you too!

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